In all of the drafts of the project, both local and global revisions can be seen. Throughout the process of writing this paper, there is one paragraph that thoroughly went through the process of global revision. In the earliest draft, the paragraph is the first body paragraph, but in the second two drafts it resides as the last body paragraph. To help the structure of the essay, it was put towards the end because I felt it was one of my stronger paragraphs and it started to wrap up my thoughts because it brings in examples other than my own to reinforce my points. If it were to be in the beginning of the essay, I feel as if my ideas would start off on the wrong foot by introducing circumstances that are not mine or Rheinhart’s when the project is supposed to revolve around our differing opinions. In the terms of local revision, smaller changes can be seen throughout the drafts. Sentences and phrases were added to bring in additional analysis and some were omitted to promote better word flow and concision. Specifically, the opening sentence of the second body paragraph in the first draft (later to be the first body paragraph in the newer drafts) was omitted. I felt it was unnecessary to bring in my heritage because people of other cultures and ethnicities can enjoy food that is not American as well. In the introduction local revision was used to add more to the initial drafts. More material in the introduction added to the overall conversation of the paper.
From first draft to final, the paper developed and changed. The changes that were made show attention to detail in the writing. Without the revisions, the essay would be awkward and something I would turn in during high school. Peer revisions were very helpful in the development of this paper as well as the development of my revision skills as a writer.
